Screaming pain hurtling through space
Scattered about, but in one place
Agony crying in the dark
Everything falling apart
Black tangled heart filled with scorn
Already dead, but not yet born
The blackest night filled with torturous cries
Trapped inside a web of lies
Inside, the fires burn
Will these people ever learn?
Anger, sadness, fear, regret
A wave of emotion with which I'm met
Swirling blackness erupting from deep inside
Tormented anguish I try so hard to hide
Shivering from deflated hope
My heart hanging from a noose of rope
Isolated, my pain sets me apart
All this . . . from a broken heart
I am here laying on my bed,
a glimpse of you crosses my head,
softly a tear drop rolls down my face,
then it reaches the cold floor,
racing to get to your door.
(all because i miss you so)
8 comments:
Fantastic piece !! :)
a couple of spelling mistakes there but i guess thats what life is about..
mistakes and correcting em ;)
one more advice.. the dark background is very contrasting and not so eye friendly..if you can change that template to something subtle it ll be great...
And this post...an apt start this one :)
way to go !!!.......and long way to go :) both...
Screaming pain hurtling through space
Scattered about, but in one place
Agony crying in the dark
Everything falling apart
Black tangled heart filled with scorn
Already dead, but not yet born
The blackest night filled with torturous cries
Trapped inside a web of lies
Inside, the fires burn
Will these people ever learn?
Anger, saddness, fear, regret
A wave of emotion with which I'm met
Swirling blackness erupting from deep inside
Tormented anguish I try so hard to hide
Shivering from deflated hope
My heart hanging from a noose of rope
Isolated, my pain sets me apart
All this . . . from a broken heart
i am here laying on my bed,
a glimps of you crosses my head,
siftly a tear drop rolls down my face,
then it reaches the cold floor,
racing to get to your door.
(all because i miss you so)
aap englsh me hindi ke brabar iffective he...or aap bahut hi smvedanshil praani he..aapki bhavnaaye or jajbaat aapke dil se nikal ke or dimag se fillter ho kr kalam ke jriye kaagaj pr aajate he...bhut hi behter likha he aapne isme koi sak nhi bdhaai
amazing
nothing to say only a word i hv NICE....
till date i never realized the depth of emotions but u forced me to do that...
really amazing dear........
Black tangled heart filled with scorn
Already dead, but not yet born
Will these people ever learn?
Anger, sadness, fear, regret
am here laying on my bed,
a glimpse of you crosses my head,
softly a tear drop rolls down my face,
then it reaches the cold floor,
racing to get to your door.
wow
u potray the love n apart from love u show yur inside
u narrate not the incidents but the feeling
which are so conciousif they know someone is watching them so minutely they can vanish like wind in atmosphere ..prachi u r real lover so u can go so deep ...i appreciate yur poetic capcity n observation ...wid minute restriction for yur selection of words yur word selection shud be so powerfull n spontaneous as it is in hindi .....u done splendid creation ..congrats.....rakesh
Rakesh ji......
Thanks for appreciation in cherished word.
Your awe gives me so much of contentment and coolness
Oh dear ... really i dont know how one can describe a BROKEN HEART in a better way with better words then Urs ..... Amazing ....
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